Announcement Use

Announcements are like clearing your throat before a big speech. When you use them in writing, you may distract the reader. Writers in some disciplines use announcements to organize their projects, so revise your use of announcements based on the project you are working on right now. If someone told you to read this comment, it is because announcements are not appropriate in your particular writing assignment. Here is an example of an announcement:

“In this paper, I will discuss the relationship between Helena and Hermia in A Midsummer Night’s Dream.”

You should avoid sentences like the following:

In this paper, I will….

This paragraph will discuss…

Now that I have explained ____, I will move on to…

In conclusion, this paper has discussed …

Now that you have finished this paper, you know…

How can I revise my announcements?

The best way to revise announcements is to delete unnecessary words. Get right to the purpose of the sentence. Here are some examples:

Original: In this paper, I will discuss why electric cars are the future of transportation.

Revised: Electric cars are the future of transportation.

Original: In conclusion, this paper has explained how stem cell research should be regulated.

Revised: In conclusion, stem cell research should be regulated.

Original: This paragraph has explained why the drinking age should be lowered to 18.

Revised: The drinking age should be lowered to 18.

When you remove announcements from your writing, you will be able to see what sentences need more details. When the announcements were removed from the last example about the drinking age, you saw that the sentence just stated an opinion. Add details to support the opinion, as in the example below.

The drinking age should be lowered to 18 because that is the age for adulthood in the US. Because 18 is the legal age for adulthood in the US, that should also be the legal drinking age.